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I know Im not the best artist/animator but my tablet arrives soon, and so I'll get better! I meant to ask you, what animation programs do you use?
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So to the critiquing...
Cats who are in shock (As Cinderpelt was) should have their ears backward, or at least a little angled downward.
And I don't know if I am correct, but the dew claw/thumb I think should be on the other side (I may be wrong)
Vision: Perfect for people who have read the books and know what's going on, totally perfect.
Originality: Very original in the crouching down stance, the tiger head sort of roaring in the fire is very original from other pictures I've seen previously.
Technique: Very good technique (considering I use paint XD) and much more better than what I could ever achieve (which isn't much) You can tell you spent a lot of time on this without seeing the speedpaint or reading the description.
Impact: For people who have read the books, this I believe is what many people imagine.
Okay, now let's begin with the background/fire.
Even though the background is not the main focus, it could still have a big impact on the picture. I honestly think the background could use more work, the first tree by Cinderpelt could have more detail on it, such as darker marks to show the texture of the tree and a bit of highlight to indicate that light is hitting it. Also the tree doesn't turn that way immediately at the bottom, it starts slanting upwards. Still add some more details in the other tree too, Also, if the grass is close to the fire, there should be more shades to show the intensity of the fire, and Cinderpelt's shadow(s) should be darker if the main source of light is coming just from the fire. The way how you drew the fire is really good, and most people tend to get lazy on that! I'd only suggest making the fire a bit brighter, from what I've studied on fire, the bottom/middle of the flame is really bright, then a bit less bright as the flames spread higher.
Also the Tiger is a bit hard to see, plus you should also somehow connect it to the fire itself!
Okay, now for Cinderpelt.
The ears should be back if she is in shock/fear/anger since that's what cats do when they're scared/etc. Also the nose is too high up, think of it like a human nose, the start of the nose begins at the start of the eyes and continues further down. The muzzle is a bit too small, make it bigger, and also add a chin! Cat's have chins too! I honestly can't see the cat's neck, maybe you can make it a bit longer. Also the cat's shoulder shouldn't be in front of it's face. Also, you added the dew claw on the wrong side, remember to put it on the other side next time! I also think the cat's paw is a bit too big, make it a tad smaller, oh and also add cat whiskers! For the shading and highlights, I think it looks fine, you just need to add more darker places for shade, since Cinderpelt is right near the fire.
Overall, it's a beautiful piece. :3 Keep up the good work!
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